ENG 101 Broward College Healthcare Disparities in the US Persuasive Essay

This was my feed back from my professor i would like for you to review and help me make this better. I feel that i am all over the place.

Good start, Catalina! But let’s be more clear about this topic of health disparity. Who does it affect the most with regard to groups, class, gender, etc. And what do you mean by ‘Americans acquire 55% medical attention? Does that mean I should spend half my life at a doc’s office? Not trying to be funny, but that’s what the sentence tells me, so very important to clarify that. Very interesting & current choice in topic!